Not good in current form. HORROR needs the player to be involved. Immersed in the story. Because there IS no story its boring.
I was really hoping for something interesting but I was disappointed.
You have the choice of "wear a mask" or "don't wear a mask". That's it.
If you "don't wear a mask" you get railroaded around locations (with no story happening, and no choices) until you are killed by an NPC with no explanation.
If you "wear a mask" you get told you can "never be yourself" and be a boy wearing a skirt or else someone will kill you. Then it ends.
Don't know what this is, but it's not a game. Barely even a scene in a game.
This is supposed to be a VISUAL NOVEL. A novel should "SHOW not TELL". All that happens is you have a few backgrounds that change and text says they "she kills you".
No world building. No background. No story, not even a hint.
You saying "she kills you" without ever giving even an imagined reason for any of this is not a plot. Not a story.
This shouldn't be "version 1.0" since that indicates a complete playable game. This is barely a demo.
"While you are walking you can see how the thoughts and words of people create a girl who wears medical gown with blood on it"
In the story She is not even real, she is the rendering of what the say about the main character.
Anyway i will update this game and i will try to make this game better so again thank you for the review and feedback.
PD: i realeased a small update and i changed "make" to "create" and one more thing i will use all your feedback i think you are right in almost everything
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Not good in current form. HORROR needs the player to be involved. Immersed in the story. Because there IS no story its boring.
I was really hoping for something interesting but I was disappointed.
You have the choice of "wear a mask" or "don't wear a mask". That's it.
If you "don't wear a mask" you get railroaded around locations (with no story happening, and no choices) until you are killed by an NPC with no explanation.
If you "wear a mask" you get told you can "never be yourself" and be a boy wearing a skirt or else someone will kill you. Then it ends.
Don't know what this is, but it's not a game. Barely even a scene in a game.
Thank you for the review of my game i will try to fix the game :D
EDIT: it has a explanation the fact that she murders you
This is supposed to be a VISUAL NOVEL. A novel should "SHOW not TELL". All that happens is you have a few backgrounds that change and text says they "she kills you".
No world building. No background. No story, not even a hint.
You saying "she kills you" without ever giving even an imagined reason for any of this is not a plot. Not a story.
This shouldn't be "version 1.0" since that indicates a complete playable game. This is barely a demo.
There is a hint when the game says:
"While you are walking you can see how the thoughts and words of people create a girl who wears medical gown with blood on it"
In the story She is not even real, she is the rendering of what the say about the main character.
Anyway i will update this game and i will try to make this game better so again thank you for the review and feedback.
PD: i realeased a small update and i changed "make" to "create" and one more thing i will use all your feedback i think you are right in almost everything
HI